"Your keep on walking in circles till your six feet underground."That is a killer line ;) "I used to have imaginations, And memories inside my head I wanna go back and re-visit, But the thoughts of everything we had are dead...DEAD." Very hooky chorus. Great job of writing some punky pop that sticks in the head.

Very good track indeed Dan. Very catchy yet simple. Lyrics are very good and so is your voice mate. As you said yourself the production aint what it should be but there are some great artists on here that could maybe help you. There are some very handy threads in MUSIC HELP section about compressing that also maybe helpful. Hope to hear this in it's full glory someday but for the moment, very well done so far bud. Rated. Barry

Think you've got great potential Dan. Like your song. Could really be a stomper with a funky baseline and some additional tinkering. Keep it up and welcome to the site bud.

A textbook example of how a good song can shine despite a poor mix. Hope you'll find a band, much more fun than tinkering behind a comp imho ;-)

Hey, Dan! Good tune you got here. Starting off with the guitar was a good idea. But it does sound a little plain. Maybe broadening the sound a bit would help a lot. DEPTH my man! :D You have a really smooth voice. That take is as clean as a new car but I'd like to hear some reverb. Maybe a tiny bit of chorus too. You have a lot of potential with that voice, dude. The Bass Drum needs some punch too. I can't really tell how full it is because it's hard to hear. So you may need to adjust. May not. The snare needs to be turned up too. Make it more prominent sounding. I would mess around with it a bit. Snares are cool to mess around with, lol. All in all, It's a great song but you just need to play around with it a little bit to get more out of it. The feel of it was calming and chatty. I'll send you a rate!

Very catchy track. The mix is all wrong as regards levels but putting that aside the song itself is very good, Green Day already mentioned below and style wise this is pretty close to them which has got to be good. Rated. Craig

I thought the guitars could be thickened a bit but that's just personal preference. Add some power to the vox and this could easily sound like green day (which is good in my book :)

Very catchy I am enjoying this plenty!

The recording is clean, so you've got that part of the trick right! If you're looking for help with the mixing malarky, you'll find plenty of people here who konw the game backwards. (Sadly, I'm not one of them.) This is the catchiest and most propulsive of your ditties. Good luck with it for the future.

Nice one. This is really catchy. I think the drums could be brought forward in the mix, maybe turn the hats down a bit, but that's only one persons opinion. Fantastic track, though! I'd love to get my mitts on the dry files and see what happens. Really catchy. Rated!

Better production on this than Revenge.....another catchy song well-written and performed.......if you go on the messageboards you'll find help with production issues :) Kevin Mooney

Dan You've got a great orginal sound!!! rated

Yeah this is catchy alright, and it does sound like a disney track lol, glad to have you on the site, after this I expect great things from you, rated!!!

bounced along nicely, sounds almost like something for a disney film or something like that

Nice one Dan - Like the vocals and appreciate the deceptively simple style - a good reminder that the whole is clearly more than the sum of it's parts (or whatever that line was!!) welcome aboard, maybe collaboration on line the next best thing to a band - hope you stick around and post some more - jon

Hi Dan welcome to the site. Pleased to be the first to comment. Neat structure and sweet vox but needs opening up and given some punch. I'll see what other folks think 1st. Take a rate as a welcome (see button below player to the left!!)