Really interesting songwriting. Watch those plosives (p's and b's) on your vocals, they're distracting. Use a pop-shield, mate! I think this song could be developed into a full rock track. I suspect there's two vocal tracks at work here. I'd make the most of that by seperating them spatially on the stereo stage. Welcome to the crazy house. Let's hear more!

I`m with the rest that your song writing talent shines like a beacon. You also have an interesting vocal style and tone (reminds me of an early Greenday) Great work from a young musician - Give you a couple of years and I reckon you will be knocking out tunes to compete at the highest levels. Gets my nom Ant

Good songwriting....your vocal makes me gulp breath...try and breathe now and then or u will keel over on stage! I am a lyricist and was impressed the way the angsty start ended up with you being madly in love...works for me. Also like the progression of sound with such basic instrument....like Degsy said, you give us enough so that we can envisage a finished song with all the harmonies and a full band behind you. WTG!! Keep this up!!

I like your style of music , and could hear this song in a full blow song .great stuff. vocals are cool nice work

Great song and a solid hook on the chorus. Your vocal is clear and up front. A but on the dry end but that's okay as the performance is good and your compression levels are very good as well. The guitar in many parts seems distant as well the break towards the end the vocals are too distant. Keep it all up front since this piece is dry, everything must be consistent. You're a good songwriter. Rated for the composition. rl